Today's review is on Ember by Madison Daniel
It is so disheartening to read a book that could have so much
potential, only to be thwarted by editing mistakes. Though a decent
story, Ember has some serious errors to correct. Not only were commas
missing in action in some spots, but some were present where they were
not needed. But that is not the only problem. There were several
instances where it's obvious that the writer needs to brush up on his
synonym's and make sure he uses the right words.
Most importantly however is the POV of the writing itself. If the
book is from the POV of Max, how can he know what is happening from
Sam's POV, or Asia's? It doesn't make sense the way it is, and
interrupts the flow of reading.
Max Valentine hasn't had the easiest life. He's lost his baby
sister, his mother, and now his father, and blames himself for all of
it. Now he has come to Hawaii to start over. With his guitar slung
across his back he lands on Maui and moves in with his uncle.
The drama comes on full force when he saves the life of dog that was
the victim of a hit and run. Then while practicing to control his
power, he ends up saving the life of the beautiful local girl, Asia.
Instantly he feels drawn to her, but is shocked by her retreating
The next morning he is picked up for school by the daughter of one
of his uncles friends. Again he is instantly attracted to the angel he
sees before him. Sam makes him smile and makes him feel safe.
Instead of feeling sad for Max's dilemma; having two beautiful girls
wanting him, I found that I was actually angry at him for stringing
them both along for so long. The fact that he actually had "relations"
with one of them, and just about had "relations" with the other, only
intensified my anger. Was this what the author wanted? I'm not sure.
Max ends up leaving everyone behind as he seemingly runs away from
his problems. Is he leaving to find Asia, or to find himself? Will he
be able to let go of the blame he carries for the death of Mia? Can he
ever forgive himself?
There is a second book; Downpour, expected to follow Ember. Will I
read it? More than likely, but I will be looking for better editing,
better writing, and a better story line.
3 of 5 stars
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